Possibilities SOLC 9 of 31
I've been reading a lot of poetry this week and thought I'd give it a try. It's not a genre I usually write. The weekend (especially Saturday morning when the whole weekend looms ahead) always gives me time to slow down, take a breath and savor. So, here is my first attempt at poetry on my blog.
Disclaimer: Remember, all of my kids are grown up now. I remember Saturdays that were filled with sports and music events. I would have written an entirely different poem about the weekends 10 years ago. :)
Possibilities
Today floats in
gently,
quietly,
and whispers of
possibilities.
Time reaches out.
Beckoning me closer.
I slip into her embrace
carefully,
relishing
the promise
of
peace,
solitude,
accomplishment.
Your words and the shape of them reach out. Keep at the poetry. It is good.
ReplyDeleteThank you Elle. The shape just happened and then I liked it, so I played with it a bit more.
DeleteA moment nicely captured!
ReplyDeleteThank you. I savor these Saturday mornings.
DeleteLovely!
ReplyDeleteThanks Gretchen!
DeleteI love the shape of your poem! It felt like it was gently blowing... like a breeze through a willow. :)
ReplyDeleteI wrote poetry on my blog today, too!
I am going over to your blog right now to check it out. :)
DeleteI like slipping into time's embrace :). That's a beautiful concept!
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Thank you. I played with that line quite a bit.
DeleteYour first attempt is great...please continue. I liked your disclaimer too! Your words flowed easily, as they seemed to flow by their placement on the blog.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jackie. I had to add the disclaimer the end. All I could think about was how hectic Saturday mornings used to be when our kids were still at home. :)
DeletePerhaps you shold continue writing poetry. Your word choice creates a visual for the reader. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kristen. I had fun writing it.
DeleteSounds like a perfect day - whispers of possibilities. I agree -- you need to continue to write more poetry. Eloquent!
ReplyDeleteThank you Michelle. Saturdays are full of promise and Sunday is filled with, "Yikes, I still have a lot to do!" :)
DeleteThis is a very impressive FIRST poetry post! As someone who is thoroughly intimidated by poetry, I find great encouragement watching people post their poetry. You all make it look so easy! :) I really like this piece.
ReplyDeleteI say go for it! What have you got to lose? :)
DeleteThe layout of your poem gives it a sense of gently floating on a breeze -a peaceful, easy feeling. As a probationary poet this is a fine use of words. You should be well pleased. The world needs its poets. We are the ones who capture rainbows in jars...
ReplyDeleteAs others have noted, straying from the left margin is a very apt and effective choice. Personification is a great device to make abstract concepts (today, time) into more concrete presences in your writing. Nice! :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!
ReplyDeleteI love how you gave shape to this season in your life.
Your poem spoke to me today, Julie...I've been thinking a lot about "time" and what I would like to accomplish in the years (that are going by so quickly) ahead. I need to "slip into her embrace" instead of running like a wild woman. I need to get rid of the feeling that it's a race, and embrace peace, solitude, and accomplishment.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the gift of your thoughts!